The proposed system organizes recipes in database storage, as well as by keeping track of a food inventory, system is capable in preparing an ultimate grocery list.
Proposed system will have two modes: web based and stand alone application.
Ratings:
Syntax = 3
Plausibility = 4
Support = 5
Novelty = 4
Stakeholders = 3
Scope = 3
Profitability = 4
Legal = 5
Security = 4
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Total score of the document = 3.8
Clarification on ratings:
- Syntax
- Plausibility
- Support
- Novelty
- Stakeholders
- " young tech savvy professionals." Such specific and narrowed categorization of the end user, might draw away interest in a product from many potential users as well as stakeholders.
- Scope
- Profitability
- Legal
- Security
(1st page, 1st paragraph, last sentence)
"As a follower of many top food blogs and a home cook and baker I feel
qualified to advise and participate in this project."
This sentence above somewhat unclear and have too conjunctions with no commas or other clause/sentence breaks. I would strongly suggest rephrasing this sentence into something as follows:
"As a follower of many top food blogs, a home cook, and a baker, I feel
qualified to advise and participate in this project."
(2nd page, 2nd paragraph, 3rd sentence)
"However keeping..." is missing a comma, and should be written as "However, keeping..."
(3rd page, 1st paragraph, 2nd sentence)
"Products range in cost from $80-free.
The formatting of this sentence would generally look better and more professional as follows:
Products range in cost from $80 to free.
Formatting of the time line spread sheet was in non-viewable format. Table is over several pages, probably larger scale of the time line range should have been selected.
In general, though out the document, there are few clauses that are missing clause breaks, which decrease document's readability and clarity.
Scope of the project is somewhat unclear. Author mentions two modes of the final product, however, due to highly competitive market of proposed product, it seems to be logical for the end user to expect all of the features listed in "Background" section of the document.
Author of the proposal done great research on the proposed product and have great listings as an attachment for viewing.
Highly competitive market with ready to use applications at no cost to the end user. However, keeping database for inventory control is the main attraction for this product compare with the ones listed. I would suggest to put a higher emphasis on this distinguished characteristic to attract higher number of potential stakeholders.
Proposer places high emphasis on proposer's personal usage of the product. That is not generally what the stakeholders want to see in the proposals.
In addition, the following wording as a reference to potential users needs to be carefully thought through:
Scope is unclear on what particular features will be implemented and what features will not be included in implementation. But I like optimistic mood of the proposer when she referring to add-ons if project will get "ahead of schedule." ;)
It is hard to compete with the 'free' stuff out there, as well as advertising new product that is somewhat similar to many others.
Nothing mentioned on legal issues, but personally, I don't see any problems with this product.
Nothing was mention on how would the proposer would manage protection of database and its back-ups. Safety of collection of data is major concern of the end user, especially if it took one to collect something over a long period of time.
In overall, the product idea is very interesting and promising. The author seems to be competent for successful completion.
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